The woods
One day I went on a walk in the woods with my dog. My dog heard a noise and ran away back to the house. I ran after him but I got lost and I did not know what to do. I was very scared. I went on a path that was there but it only brought me further into the woods. Then I heard a noise then I was very scared. When I turned the corner I saw a bike in a tree. Then I heard a noise again then I got very scared. Then I started to run and I found my we out.
by Dónal
Wow Dónal! I loved your story! Goodness though, do you think you’ll ever find out what the noise was!
Dear Donal,
Your 100wc story brought me from the beginning to the end in a sequential manner. It makes sense, good job. You built suspense when you became lost and started hearing noises. I’m glad you were safe in the end. Reread your story and see if you can change the way you use temporal phrases (then). Keep writing!
Sincerely,
Mrs. Kathleen Silver
IL, USA
Team 100
Dear Dónal,
Your story was very unique and interesting. I like that you used the realistic fiction genre. You let us know you were very scared well. Just that next time remember titles are capitalized. Overall it was a great story.
Sincerely,
Alexandra