The Big War
Long long ago there was a big war between humans and tree monsters. It was a big one too. The humans set ablaze lots of trees but the tree monsters kept fighting. The humans killed a lot of trees but the trees killed a lot of humans too. It lasted a short time. It was about three months. In the end the trees lost and the humans won. That was a long time ago. Now all the wood they got from the war is firewood and a lot more people are surviving. Meanwhile on the other planet the tree monsters are planning another attack on the humans. This war is not over by a long shot.
The end
By Patrick
Wow. You certainly have created some action in your writing Patrick. I just hope everyone knows who’s fighting who!
I wonder if you needed to write The End. A good writers work tells the reader when the piece is complete. Perhaps in this case you could have used an ellipses.
This war is not over by a long shot …
What do you think?
Jackie (Team 100WC)
New Zealand